academic writing task 2: person's worth
Posted: Fri Nov 11, 2016 6:53 pm
Hello everyone I took this writing task 2 topic from british council resources for ielts.
I need a 6.5/ 7 in the writing part, but last time I tried the ielts (academic) I didn't reach this mark, so if you can correct it I would be really glad to receive our advice to improve myself in this part of the exam.
Thank you very much indeed.
A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Generally speaking social status and possessions have always been looked as something to admire or to reach from ordinary people, but in the last few years , more than before, it seems to be that fame and wealth have surprisengly superseded the true life value.
It is apparent that the enourmous impact that celebrities are having is due to the futher spread of social media communication system such as blog, youtube channel and not least facebook and instagram profile. In fact not only do this virtual communication allows celebrities to be constantly exposed but also it create the appearance that they are more like "common people". A good example of this would be instagram where everyone can litterally follows famous star profile as he or she was his or her friend.
Obviously this is an extremely positive advantage for celebrities themself but it has substantially influenced our way to classify what is a real value and what is not. In this way some people have started to base our judjment just on what can eyes can see without looking through.
Nevertheless I feel this is only one side of the argument. Actually when it concerns our life, which involves relationships with someone real,what we really care for are solid value, such as friendship, honesty, trust.
For instance when we need to pick someone to trust, our choice will be the one person that we trust more, the one that show to me honest even than the richest one, because money are nothing compared to personal feeling and this will always be a matter of fact.
To sum up ,it seems to me that in the day by day life our yardstick and our mindset alike give priority to old fashion value and that, even though overall wealth can be an attractive magnet is just an added value compared to which that are the significant ones.
I need a 6.5/ 7 in the writing part, but last time I tried the ielts (academic) I didn't reach this mark, so if you can correct it I would be really glad to receive our advice to improve myself in this part of the exam.
Thank you very much indeed.
A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Generally speaking social status and possessions have always been looked as something to admire or to reach from ordinary people, but in the last few years , more than before, it seems to be that fame and wealth have surprisengly superseded the true life value.
It is apparent that the enourmous impact that celebrities are having is due to the futher spread of social media communication system such as blog, youtube channel and not least facebook and instagram profile. In fact not only do this virtual communication allows celebrities to be constantly exposed but also it create the appearance that they are more like "common people". A good example of this would be instagram where everyone can litterally follows famous star profile as he or she was his or her friend.
Obviously this is an extremely positive advantage for celebrities themself but it has substantially influenced our way to classify what is a real value and what is not. In this way some people have started to base our judjment just on what can eyes can see without looking through.
Nevertheless I feel this is only one side of the argument. Actually when it concerns our life, which involves relationships with someone real,what we really care for are solid value, such as friendship, honesty, trust.
For instance when we need to pick someone to trust, our choice will be the one person that we trust more, the one that show to me honest even than the richest one, because money are nothing compared to personal feeling and this will always be a matter of fact.
To sum up ,it seems to me that in the day by day life our yardstick and our mindset alike give priority to old fashion value and that, even though overall wealth can be an attractive magnet is just an added value compared to which that are the significant ones.