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Nowadays adults are not involved in exercises as they used to be when they were children.

what are the reasons?

what can be done?


It is true that many adults give up exercises as they grow up. While there are several causes for this trend, there are few steps which can help to make the workout a part of everyday routine.

Between work, children, schools and homework, it is difficult sometimes to find a chance to exercise, and after a long day, there is no enough energy to do any physical activity. Another reason for not to exercise is spending free time in competing interests such as video games, chatting with friends or watching movies. many adults have physical conditions which make exercise more difficult, for example, heart disease, joints pain or obesity. Others become unmotivated when they do not see results.


However, there are many ways to make exercise a habit. Firstly, if there is no enough time to go to a gym, it is probably better to take stairs rather than the elevator. Moreover, waking to children schools rather than driving. Instead of leaving workout to the end of the day where there is no power to exercise, it can be a good idea to set the alarm twenty minutes earlier than usual and do some aerobics. Making exercise a priority and find a way to do the workout while enjoying interests is a great way to have a healthy lifestyle. For instance, playing laser games. For those who have medical difficulty, they can start workout under the supervision of qualified trainers.


To conclude, while there are various reasons which make adults unable to practise sport, there are numerous steps which if taken seriously can have great effects on the health of people.

[David.IELTS.Examiner]

Hello!

I like this essay! Good, simple ideas. Clear organisation and good use of connectives. A nice variety of grammar. Some high level vocabulary and phrasing (under the supervision of). There are mistakes, but meaning is clear and they do not interfere with reading and comprehension.

Well done!
David

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Nowadays adults are not involved in exercises as they used to be when they were children.

what are the reasons?

what can be done?


It is true that many adults give up exercising as they grow up. While there are several causes for this trend, there are a few steps which can help to make a workout a part of everyday routine.

Between work, children, school and homework, it is difficult sometimes to find a chance to exercise, and after a long day, there is not enough energy to do any physical activity. Another reason for not exercising is spending free time in competing interests such as video games, chatting with friends or watching movies. Many adults have physical conditions which make exercise more difficult, for example, heart disease, joint pain or obesity. Others become unmotivated when they do not see results.


However, there are many ways to make exercise a habit. Firstly, if there is not enough time to go to a gym, it is probably better to take the stairs rather than the elevator. Moreover, walking the children to school rather than driving. Instead of leaving a workout to the end of the day where there is no energy to exercise, it can be a good idea to set the alarm twenty minutes earlier than usual and do some aerobics. Making exercise a priority and finding a way to do the workout while enjoying other interests is a great way to have a healthy lifestyle. For instance, playing laser games. For those who have medical difficulties, they can start working out under the supervision of qualified trainers.


To conclude, while there are various reasons which make adults unable to practise sport, there are numerous steps which, if taken seriously, can have great effects on the health of people.