Writing Task 1 - Please check my answer, if you have time, thank you

[josip.plascevic]

The table below shows the figures (in thousand) for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980.

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The table illustrates the imprisonments in five different countries through five decades, from 1930 to 1980. While some countries had major fluctuations, there was an upward trend in one country.

According to the table, imprisonments in Great Britain steadily grew, from 30 thousand in the year 1930 all the way to approximately 90 thousand in 1980. Opposite to that, all other countries, which include Australia, New Zealand, United States and Canada, dramatically varied. Great Britain and Australia started with gentle fall, from 1930 to 1950, when there was a minor growth in 1970. These countries hit a plateau in 1970, where all of them came to the same number, slightly over 60 thousand imprisonments and ended in a different way, New Zealand with a decrease and Australia with a decrease. The slightly different situation happened in the United States in Canada. The United States started with 100 thousand imprisonments in 1930, rose to 130 thousand in 1940 and then fluctuated to the year 1980 where it hit a peak at just over 130 thousand imprisonments. Canada had a similar situation, started with 120 thousand imprisonments in the year 1930, slightly varied to the year 1950 and then there was a gradual decrease. Finally, Canada finished with a minor growth with about 90 thousand imprisonments in 1980.



The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.)


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The diagram illustrates the percentage of unpaid work in between genders. Due to many obligations that women have, the overall trend shows that married women are usually doing much more work than married men.

According to the diagram, as the number of kids grows, the number of hours of the unpaid work is following that rise. The highest number of hours for the work that is being unpaid belongs to women, who have at least 3 kids, with around 60 hours. Opposite to that, married men with the same number of kids have approximately 15 hours. In the middle of the diagram, it is seen that men again have significantly fewer hours than women. Finally, the lowest number of hours of unpaid work comes without children, both for married women and men. Still, woman have a considerably larger number of unpaid hours, just under 30, while men have the same number as with 1 – 2 children, approximately 20 unpaid hours.
After analysing the diagram, it seems that the number of children means more unpaid hours of work for married women because they have much more household works, such as garden work and childcare. In contrast to that, and due to lack of household work, the number of unpaid hours stays the same for men.