Please evaluate my Task 2 essay. Thank you!

[padmanabhan.r90]

The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads.
Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

People started using cars in the UK in 1888, and more than a century later, in 2000, the number of cars on Britain's roads has gone up to almost 29 million. Some people think that alternative modes of transport should be encouraged and that all countries should introduce laws to control car ownership and usage. In my view, strict international laws should be introduced to limit the number of cars on road and its negative impact the nature and society.

In the past decade, there has been a surge in the number of people using cars as their main mode of commute, and this is having a deleterious effect on the environment. Unless this is checked, it could do more harm than ever to the worsening levels of pollution. Some nations are already taking steps to curb the usage of personal vehicles. For instance, in India, the government introduced laws prohibiting car manufacturers and dealers from selling any vehicles for 6 months, and encouraged people to use public transport. This saw a 30% reduction in the number of vehicles on road which indirectly led to reduction in pollution levels. Thus, it is clear that the benefits of limiting the number of cars on roads are undeniable.

Furthermore, the spike in the number of cars has led to increased road accidents. Take, for example, in China, more than half of the road accidents were attributed to the increase in the number of vehicles on road, and majority of the vehicles involved in some road accident were cars. Laws have to be mandated which would limit people from using their own modes of transport. This can not only control traffic on road, but also keep the rising number of accidents in check. Unless compulsory laws to control car usage are introduced, the rise in the number of accidents cannot be reduced.

In conclusion, the importance of controlling the number of cars is apparent. Introducing international laws to keep the rising car usage in check is more important than ever, now that the world is witnessing peak levels of pollution and rising accidents.

[saqibali]

The essay is out of the topic, particularly the second paragraph.

Please recheck. If you kindly rewrite it again, it will be much improved and I will be in position to assess your skills in more details.

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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads.
Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

People started using cars in the UK in 1888, and more than a century later, in 2000, the number of cars on Britain's roads has increased to almost 29 million. Some people think that alternative modes of transport should be encouraged and that all countries should introduce laws to control car ownership and usage. In my view, strict international laws should be introduced to limit the number of cars on the road and its negative impact on nature and society.

In the past decade, there has been a surge in the number of people using cars as their main mode of transport, and this is having a deleterious effect on the environment. Unless this is checked, it could do more harm than ever to the worsening levels of pollution. Some nations are already taking steps to curb the usage of personal vehicles. For instance, in India, the government introduced laws prohibiting car manufacturers and dealers from selling any vehicles for 6 months, and encouraged people to use public transport. This saw a 30% reduction in the number of vehicles on the road, which indirectly led to a reduction in pollution levels. Thus, it is clear that the benefits of limiting the number of cars on roads are undeniable.

Furthermore, the spike in the number of cars has led to increased road accidents. For example, in China, more than half of all road accidents were attributed to the increase in the number of vehicles on the road, and a majority of the vehicles involved in road accidents were cars. Laws have to be mandated which would limit people from using their own modes of transport. This will not only control traffic, but also keep the rising number of accidents in check. Unless compulsory laws to control car usage are introduced, the rise in the number of accidents cannot be reduced.

In conclusion, the importance of controlling the number of cars is apparent. Introducing international laws to keep rising car usage in check is more important than ever, now that the world is witnessing peak levels of pollution and rising accidents.