Could you evaluate and give your feedback on my task 2 essay. Thanks a lot...

[chaitanya.k]

PRISON IS THE BEST PUNISHMENT FOR CRIMINALS. DISCUSS

Punishment has always been accepted by many societies as the only way for a criminal to repay for his/her crime. Across the civilisations, there have been a variety of methods in which a criminal was punished. Some believe that, prison is the best punishment for criminals and some refute this. These points of view will be discussed in this order.

It is believed by some that imprisonment for a certain period of time proportional to the crime, is the best punishment. An idea that supports this point of view is that, the criminal realises the harm committed to the victim and the pain that the victim had to suffer. It can be argued that this practice will remain in the future. Thus, it is clear why some people gravitate towards this point of view.

On the other hand, many argue that prison should not be the best punishment for all the criminals. For example, criminals who have committed reasonably small crime should be assigned a different type of punishment or task such as social service. Thus, these criminals should not be allowed to share an institute with those who have committed a very bad crime because, this will act in a destructive way and destroy the purpose of the punishment. After analysing thee facts, it is very clear why many support this claim.

For reasons related to the type of crime and the prison environment, the issue of prison assessed as the best punishment for criminals is supported and refuted by many. However, after analysing the above point of views, it is clear that the crime and the respective criminal are to be scrutinised very carefully before assigning the punishment. Thus the argument that, prison is the best punishment for many criminal cannot be supported and is expected to never be realised.

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[David.IELTS.Examiner]

Hello!

There's a classic error with this T2 question - let's see if you make it!

Second main paragraph - Well done! you didn't fall in to the trap!

The conclusion is longer than the first main paragraph and almost as long as the second. In other words, you haven't developed your points. The points are good, by the way, just need more detail.

Vocabulary is good, with some topic-specific items, especially in the second main paragraph. There are some grammatical errors, but range and accuracy are not bad.

In total, quite a good essay (i.e. no terrible errors) but make sure that you put more information in the main paragraphs than in the introduction and conclusion. Then you'd have a very good essay!

All the best,
David

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PRISON IS THE BEST PUNISHMENT FOR CRIMINALS. DISCUSS

Punishment has always been accepted by many societies as the only way for a criminal to repay his/her crime. Across the civilisations, there have been a variety of methods in which a criminal was punished. Some believe that prison is the best punishment for criminals while some refute this. These points of view will be discussed in this order.

It is believed by some that imprisonment for a certain period of time proportional to the crime is the best punishment. An idea that supports this point of view is that the criminal realises the harm committed to the victim and the pain that the victim had to suffer. It can be argued that this practice will remain in the future. Thus, it is clear why some people gravitate towards this point of view.

On the other hand, many argue that prison is not the most suitable punishment for all crimes. For example, criminals who have committed a reasonably small crime should be assigned a different type of punishment or task such as community service. Thus, these criminals should not be forced to share an institute with those who have committed a very bad crime, because, this will destroy the purpose of the punishment. After analysing these facts, it is very clear why many support this viewpoint.

For reasons related to the type of crime and the prison environment, the issue of prison beingthe best punishment for criminals is supported and refuted by many. However, after analysing the above points of view, it is clear that the crime and the respective criminal are to be scrutinised very carefully before assigning the punishment. Thus, the argument that prison is the best punishment for many criminals cannot be supported and is expected to never be realised.(<--I don't understand this sentence.)

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