Please evaluate essay: Best way to reduce traffic accidents

[drakbarshahid]

The best way to reduce the number of traffic accidents is to raise age
limit for the younger drivers and lower age limit for the aged ones. Do
you agree?

It is generally accepted that road accidents have increased in the last few decades. The reasons for this increase can be many but it is agreed that such accidents can be reduced if age limit for young drivers is increased, and for older people it is increased. This argument will be explained in the following paragraphs.
For young people, the age limit should be increased because their temperament and attitude towards importance of life is not that mature. Young people, especially teenagers, take driving as fun rather than a serious and crucial matter. Inspired by hollywood movies, where they watch action heroes performing different stunts, they try to mimic the same situation or activity in real life as well. Another important reason, in my personal point of view and also supported by statistics, is the increasing trend of drinking alcohol. Although governments, all over the world, try to impose the legislations to inhibit such events, by putting ban on driving while drinking alcohol or one must have a certain level of alcohol in the blood. In spite of all such efforts, accidents do occur and young drivers are mostly found drunk. Therefore an increase in age limit will help to reduce such tragic events.
As for as older people are concerned, decreasing age limit can also reduce the number of accidents. However the impact of such legislation may not be that evident as it would be by increasing the age limit for young people. The reason for this is that old people still are more careful while driving compared to young people. But in certain cases where vision is more critical while driving, that may be one of the many factors, dictates the aged people may not be suitable to drive. Physical strength is also an important factor while driving. It may not be important in normal driving on normal roads, but become considerable if one has to drive on longer distances and difficult to drive areas (for example hilly areas). Therefore decreasing the age limit for older people should be effective to counter the increasing trend of road accidents.
From the non serious attitude of young people towards driving and decrease in physical strength of older people, it can be concluded that age limit increase for young people and age limit decrease for older people should be a good and fruitful strategy. This way we can hope for a better life of our young and older generation.

[Flick]

The best way to reduce the number of traffic accidents is to raise age
limit for the younger drivers and lower age limit for the aged ones. Do
you agree?

It is generally accepted that road accidents have increased in the last few decades. There are many possible reasons for this increase, but it is agreed (<-- agreed by whom? Researchers? It might be better to say 'it is believed') that such accidents can be reduced if the minimum age to apply for a licence is increased, and the maximum age to be allowed to drive is decreased. This argument will be explained in the following paragraphs.
For young people, the age limit should be increased because their temperament and attitude towards the importance of life is not that mature. Young people, especially teenagers, treat driving as fun rather than a serious and crucial matter. Inspired by Hollywood movies, where they watch action heroes performing dangerous and difficultstunts, they try to mimic the activity in real life. Another important reason, in my personal point of view and also supported by statistics, is the increasing trend of drinking alcohol then driving. Although governments all over the world try to impose legislation to prevent this by putting a ban on driving while drunk, accidents do occur and young drivers are often found drunk. Therefore, an increase in the minimum age will help to reduce such tragic events.
As far as older people are concerned, lowering the age limit can also reduce the number of accidents. However, the impact of such legislation may not be as obvious as it would be by increasing the age limit for young people. The reason for this is that old people still are more careful while driving compared to young people. But, because vision is critical while driving, that may be one of the many factors that dictates the age at which people may not be suitable to drive. Physical strength is also an important factor while driving. It may not be important in normal driving on normal roads, but might be a considerable factor if one has to drive longer distances in challenging terrain, for example, hilly areas. Therefore, lowering the age limit for older people should be an effective way to counter the increasing number of road accidents.
From the non serious attitude of young people towards driving and the decrease in physical strength of older people, it can be concluded that an age limit increase for young people and an age limit decrease for older people should be a fruitful strategy to counter the growing number of road accidents. This way, we can hope for longer lives for both our younger and older generations.

[drakbarshahid]

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[hemantsharma90]

2. The best way to reduce the traffic accidents is to raise age limit for the younger drivers and limit the age for old one. Do you agree

In this decade, increased traffic accidents are one of the biggest worry for all the countries. Many feel that increasing the minimum and decreasing the maximum age limit could bring down these incidents significantly. In my views, I agree with the statement. The argument will be explained in following paragraphs.

On one hand, younger are considered to be inexperienced and aggressive drivers. They frequently try to replicate Hollywood stunts in real life which sometimes turn into accidents and by increasing the minimum age for driver’s license government can counter the issue. Furthermore, as per a recent survey, In India, 70% of road mishappenings are due to high speed and majority of victims are from 16 to 21 year age segment. In other words, adults often drink to enjoy parties and many times they drive under the influence of alcohol. Moreover, they do not obey the traffic guidelines in such situations.

As far as older are concerned, lowering age limit can also reduce such incidents. However, the impact of this legislation would not be as obvious as it would be by increasing the limit for younger. Because older drive more carefully comparatively. At this age, senior people suffer from week eyesight and they may hurt themselves and others with their driving. In addition, they lack mental and physical strength which is required in hilly and tariff congested areas such as Delhi, where people have to be very attentive while and wait for hours in tariff to reach at destination. Therefore, to avoid such situations, government should cap the maximum age as well.

To conclude, increasing the minimum and decreasing the maximum age for driving is the only viable option at this moment to bring down road accidents. I personally believe that we will see the results in short snap of time if we implement it successfully.

[Flick]

2. The best way to reduce the traffic accidents is to raise age limit for the younger drivers and limit the age for old one. Do you agree

In this decade, increased traffic accidents are one of the biggest worries for many countries. Many people feel that increasing the minimum age and decreasing the maximum age limit could reduce these incidents significantly. In my views, I agree with this statement. This opinion will be explained in the following paragraphs.

On one hand, younger people are considered to be inexperienced and aggressive drivers. They frequently try to replicate Hollywood stunts in real life which sometimes turn into accidents. By increasing the minimum age for a driver’s license, government can counter this issue. Furthermore, as per a recent survey, in India, 70% of road mishaps are due to high speed, and the majority of victims are between 16 and 21 years old. Also, adults often drink at parties and many times they drive under the influence of alcohol. Moreover, they do not obey the traffic rules in such situations.

As far as older drivers are concerned, lowering the maximum age limit can also reduce such incidents. However, the impact of this legislation would not be as obvious as it would be by increasing the limit for younger drivers because older people tend to drive more carefully comparatively. At this age,(<--What age?) senior people suffer from weak eyesight and they may hurt themselves and others with their driving. In addition, they lack mental and physical strength which is required in hilly and traffic congested areas such as Delhi, where people have to be very attentive while driving and wait for hours in traffic to reach their destination. Therefore, to avoid such situations, government should cap the maximum age as well.

To conclude, increasing the minimum age and decreasing the maximum age for driving is the only viable option at this moment to reduce road accidents. I personally believe that we will see the results almost immediately if we implement it successfully.