IELTS TASK 1 Writing
Posted: Sat Oct 28, 2017 12:12 pm
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The image depicts the complete life cycle of the salmon from the egg phase until its death.
It all starts with the eggs which have a hatching time of three months. In the first weeks, the Alevin feeds and begins taking the form factor of a Fry which is capable of swimming but is half the size of a grown Salmon. The cycle continues with the Parr and Smolt stages, increasing its size, acquiring linger marks and being able to head out of the water in order to grab some oxygen.
Once the Salmon reaches the Adult Age, its group journey across the sea may take from one to eight years. Finally, a Spawning Adult will spawn and die within two weeks and the cycle starts over again with the Salmon putting the eggs.
In conclusion, the Salmon, a very famous and tasty fish, has an eight years’ life cycle, with seven different stages, each of them signed by new skills and body changes.
The image depicts the complete life cycle of the salmon from the egg phase until its death.
It all starts with the eggs which have a hatching time of three months. In the first weeks, the Alevin feeds and begins taking the form factor of a Fry which is capable of swimming but is half the size of a grown Salmon. The cycle continues with the Parr and Smolt stages, increasing its size, acquiring linger marks and being able to head out of the water in order to grab some oxygen.
Once the Salmon reaches the Adult Age, its group journey across the sea may take from one to eight years. Finally, a Spawning Adult will spawn and die within two weeks and the cycle starts over again with the Salmon putting the eggs.
In conclusion, the Salmon, a very famous and tasty fish, has an eight years’ life cycle, with seven different stages, each of them signed by new skills and body changes.