Task 2 Essay - supermarket vs loal shops

[vipin]

Please suggest a band score and corrections for this essay

People prefer to go shopping in the supermarket rather than small shops or local markets. Why has this happened? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

It is common today for people to shop from supermarkets rather than small shops. It is argued by some that this is a negative development. However, it is disagreed and this will be proven by analyzing the benefits hypermarkets provide to its customers and to the local economy.

It is a known fact that majority of shopping decisions are influenced by two main factors- cost and convenience. Large stores are able to address both these needs of their customers .For instance, Walmart is able to negotiate a better pricing with various manufacturers as it purchases its goods in bulk. This cost reduction is eventually passed onto the shoppers, helping them save money and leaving them with a higher disposable income. Furthermore, these stores have a wide range of sections under one roof. During a single shopping trip, their customers can shop for daily needs, electronics, pet food and other things, eventually making it more convenient and favorable for them to shop at these places.

Additionally, due to their sheer magnitude, large stores also employ a lot of local people to serve their customers. Majority of these employees lack formal education and would have struggled to find a job in absence of these stores. Moreover, In India, supermarkets have often been accredited to pay their taxes honestly and in time, a practice not followed by small shopkeepers. The local government has been able to utilize these taxes to provide basic amenities to its citizens, thus, improving the overall standards of living.

In conclusion, supermarkets cater to the needs of their customers and also abide by their social responsibilities. Overall, it can be considered a positive development and it is predicted that more of these stores will open in future.

[vipin]

Bands score and areas of improvement PLEASE!!

[Flick]

People prefer to go shopping in the supermarket rather than small shops or local markets. Why has this happened? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

It is common today for people to shop in supermarkets rather than small shops. It is argued by some that this is a negative development. However, I disagree with this opinion and will discuss the benefits hypermarkets provide to its customers and to the local economy below.

It is a known fact that the majority of shopping decisions are influenced by two main factors: cost and convenience. Large stores are able to address both these needs easily. For instance, Walmart is able to negotiate a better price with various manufacturers as it purchases its goods in bulk. This saving is eventually passed on to the shoppers, helping them spend less and leaving them with a higher disposable income. Furthermore, these stores have a wide range of products under one roof. During a single shopping trip, their customers can shop for daily needs, electronics, pet food and other things, making it more convenient and preferable to shop at these places.

Additionally, due to their sheer size, large stores also employ a lot of local people to serve their customers. The majority of these employees lack formal education and would have struggled to find a job in the absence of these stores. Moreover, in India, supermarkets have often been acknowledged for paying their taxes honestly and in time, a practice not followed by many small shopkeepers. The local government has been able to utilize these taxes to provide basic amenities to its citizens, thus improving the overall standards of living.

In conclusion, supermarkets cater to the needs of their customers and also abide by their social responsibilities. Overall, it can be considered a positive development and it is predicted that more of these stores will open in future.

[vipin]

Thanks for your suggestions & corrections Flick.

[vipin]

can you provide a band score for the essay as well?

[rohitdesai]

People are more inclines toward supermarket, the simple reason is people get everything in one roof with plenty of stock and they can compare the prices of product with other brands.