please let me know how much i have improved by grading it
Posted: Sat May 10, 2014 11:51 am
TOPIC:
“Some people believe that children are given too much free time. They feel that this time should be used to more school work .How do you think people should spend their free time?
Certainly, education builds the foundation of a child character. Therefore, most of the time should be devoted to school work. Yet, sports and other recreational activities are important as well for building a sound mind and a sound body. I am strongly in favor of giving chi9ldren free time of their own choice rather than doing extra school work.
There are many points, to support the above concept of giving children free time of their choice. Majorly, the school work alone, is not sufficient in setting a strong foundation of a child’s behavior. In free time, a child gets an opportunity to sit with elders and listen to their wise talks. Most of the time there is a precious moral lesson in old people like grandmother and grandfather stories. A child can learn a lot more than learn a lot more from these real stories told by his or her elders. Secondly games and sports are very essential for the physical and mental fitness of a child’s body. There is a sound mind in a sound body”. So, a child can concentrate more in studies if a healthy body by taking part in sports competition. Sports not only give the sense of competition but also encourage a child to accept defeat. Games broaden the child vision that there is no end and no failure after losing a single game.
Lastly, recreational activities like video games, visits to friends and relatives, or to any beautiful sight refresh the mind of a child. These above mentioned activities all encourage the child to full-heartedly engage once again in the tiresome school work. More on, the child should not be burdened with studies. As, the main hard work is required once they will be in their high school. As, the high school hard work decide their career paths. So, a child should relax before that time comes.
“Some people believe that children are given too much free time. They feel that this time should be used to more school work .How do you think people should spend their free time?
Certainly, education builds the foundation of a child character. Therefore, most of the time should be devoted to school work. Yet, sports and other recreational activities are important as well for building a sound mind and a sound body. I am strongly in favor of giving chi9ldren free time of their own choice rather than doing extra school work.
There are many points, to support the above concept of giving children free time of their choice. Majorly, the school work alone, is not sufficient in setting a strong foundation of a child’s behavior. In free time, a child gets an opportunity to sit with elders and listen to their wise talks. Most of the time there is a precious moral lesson in old people like grandmother and grandfather stories. A child can learn a lot more than learn a lot more from these real stories told by his or her elders. Secondly games and sports are very essential for the physical and mental fitness of a child’s body. There is a sound mind in a sound body”. So, a child can concentrate more in studies if a healthy body by taking part in sports competition. Sports not only give the sense of competition but also encourage a child to accept defeat. Games broaden the child vision that there is no end and no failure after losing a single game.
Lastly, recreational activities like video games, visits to friends and relatives, or to any beautiful sight refresh the mind of a child. These above mentioned activities all encourage the child to full-heartedly engage once again in the tiresome school work. More on, the child should not be burdened with studies. As, the main hard work is required once they will be in their high school. As, the high school hard work decide their career paths. So, a child should relax before that time comes.