Please review my task 1 letter writing
Posted: Mon May 12, 2014 1:18 am
Dear teacher,
I would like to express my thoughts into the newest result extracted from our survey regarding the adult education. Upon analysing the bar chart below we conclude that adults go after education in order to enhance the professional skills. Although the high score reason is the interest in subjects we still have other four significant reasons in this chart relying in the professional career, which clearly shows the interest in the professional improvement along with the interest in the subject taught.
In other hand we cannot overlook the lowest bar, where are the people that attend educational institution to socialize with each other as well as gain knowledge in the subject chosen.
The second chart show the opinion of the people about how the tuition fee should be spent.
Firstly they recommend 40% of the tuition paid should be invested in the student, taking as a example the results of the first chart, we could spend this amount of revenue into laboratories, libraries, concurrent courses, within other stuff focusing the professional skill learning. The other 35% should be certainly applied to the employees, providing them all the benefits required and a well paid salary. Finally, the other 25% should be reserved to pay taxes.
I appreciate your time for reading this letter and hopefully you could share this analysis to your supervisor, because in my opinion, it is a formidable way to start reconstructing our adults education system.
Best regards,
I would like to express my thoughts into the newest result extracted from our survey regarding the adult education. Upon analysing the bar chart below we conclude that adults go after education in order to enhance the professional skills. Although the high score reason is the interest in subjects we still have other four significant reasons in this chart relying in the professional career, which clearly shows the interest in the professional improvement along with the interest in the subject taught.
In other hand we cannot overlook the lowest bar, where are the people that attend educational institution to socialize with each other as well as gain knowledge in the subject chosen.
The second chart show the opinion of the people about how the tuition fee should be spent.
Firstly they recommend 40% of the tuition paid should be invested in the student, taking as a example the results of the first chart, we could spend this amount of revenue into laboratories, libraries, concurrent courses, within other stuff focusing the professional skill learning. The other 35% should be certainly applied to the employees, providing them all the benefits required and a well paid salary. Finally, the other 25% should be reserved to pay taxes.
I appreciate your time for reading this letter and hopefully you could share this analysis to your supervisor, because in my opinion, it is a formidable way to start reconstructing our adults education system.
Best regards,