Any advice? book 6 test 1: task 2

[ali.bakhtiar]

Writing task 2:
Today the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Ads= advertises

In today’s world, advertising has the biggest share in persuasion of consumers. A good advertise can improve the sale rate of a less quality product and vice versa. Nowadays, commercial Ads are more than graphical Medias and big corporations have marked it as a “science”. For an instance, consider the Google. A big number of the Google’s dream profit has been made by Ads. But, there are a lot of rivals that Google will be faced every day! So, what is the Google’s trump card in this mess battlefield? A big part of the secret is an extensive network of “smart Ads”.
Inside the company, scientists work on the positions of user’s screen that has been more clicked! Analysis this data, show the position that audience has seen more. In other word, using this position, Google will be able to put the Ads in an efficient place that audiences are able to see them with less energy and time consuming. This is the Google’s method of excellence!
In other hand, internet marketing, in various age groups is different and celebrities have a major role in encouraging shoppers. For example, youngsters follow soccer players and Hollywood superstars’ style and clothing, or females are more interested in using perfumes and toiletries that famous actresses use.
Another sample of using smart Ads in an appropriate time, goes back to the last Oscar. Where Ellen DeGeneres-the host of festival, using the Galaxy Smart phone-the last product of the Samsung, toke a selfie of herself and all celebrities around her and twitted the picture on the web. Soon, millions of web surfers saw the picture and this new product was very popular.
As a result, in today’s market that all qualities are very close together and costumers have more choices, Ads has a basic role in improving placement of trademarks and their contribution of markets.

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Writing task 2:
Today the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Ads= advertisements

In today’s world, advertising has the biggest share in the persuasion of consumers. A good advertisement can improve the sale rate of a less quality product and vice versa. Nowadays, commercial Ads are more than graphical Medias and big corporations have marked advertising as a “science”. For instance, consider Google. A large amount of Google’s profit has been made through Ads. However, there are a lot of rivals that Google faces every day. So, what is Google’s trump card in this messy battlefield? A big part of the secret is an extensive network of “smart Ads”.
Inside the company, scientists work on the positions of user’s screen that are clicked more often. Analysis of this data shows the position that audiences focus on for longer. In other words, using this information, Google can place specific Ads in an efficient place that audiences are more likely to see them. This is Google’s method of success.
Also to be considered in internet marketing are the various age groups and which celebrities would appeal to these group. For example, youngsters follow soccer players and Hollywood superstars’ style and clothing, females are more interested in using perfumes and toiletries that famous actresses use, etc.
Another example of using smart Ads at the appropriate time, goes back to the last Oscar. When Ellen DeGeneres, the host of festival, using the Galaxy Smart phone, the most recent Samsung release, took toke a selfie of herself and all the celebrities around her and put the picture on the web. Soon, millions of web surfers saw the picture and this new Samsung product became very popular.
As a result, in today’s market where all qualities are very similar and consumers have more choices, Ads has a basic role in improving sales,

You don't really give your own opinion. You discuss how advertising is used today, but not whether you think advertising is powerful or not.

[ali.bakhtiar]

Writing task 2:
Today the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Ads= advertisements

In today’s world, advertising has the biggest share in the persuasion of consumers. A good advertisement can improve the sale rate of a less quality product and vice versa. Nowadays, commercial Ads are more than graphical Medias and big corporations have marked advertising as a “science”. For instance, consider Google. A large amount of Google’s profit has been made through Ads. However, there are a lot of rivals that Google faces every day. So, what is Google’s trump card in this messy battlefield? A big part of the secret is an extensive network of “smart Ads”.
Inside the company, scientists work on the positions of user’s screen that are clicked more often. Analysis of this data shows the position that audiences focus on for longer. In other words, using this information, Google can place specific Ads in an efficient place that audiences are more likely to see them. This is Google’s method of success.
Also to be considered in internet marketing are the various age groups and which celebrities would appeal to these group. For example, youngsters follow soccer players and Hollywood superstars’ style and clothing, females are more interested in using perfumes and toiletries that famous actresses use, etc.
Another example of using smart Ads at the appropriate time, goes back to the last Oscar. When Ellen DeGeneres, the host of festival, using the Galaxy Smart phone, the most recent Samsung release, took toke a selfie of herself and all the celebrities around her and put the picture on the web. Soon, millions of web surfers saw the picture and this new Samsung product became very popular.
As a result, in today’s market where all qualities are very similar and consumers have more choices, Ads has a basic role in improving sales,

You don't really give your own opinion. You discuss how advertising is used today, but not whether you think advertising is powerful or not.

Thanks for your advice!
It was very useful!