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Please pin point my errors and help with improvement tips

Posted: Tue Jun 10, 2014 8:42 am
by saqibali
Universities should accept equal numbers of men and women in every subject.
To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Gender discrimination and equal quota for men and women has been a well debated issue. The topic turns out to be much interesting when seats quota of girls versus boys is discussed for university admissions fully support the view that universities should offer equal number of seats to boys and girls in all subjects of studies. Analyzing its impacts on advancement of society as well as on training of children will prove my point of view.

Accepting equal number of females and males in every subject will equip females with all types of latest professional qualifications equally. This in turn, will equip women with latest technologies and latest professional education on equal basis. Since women play a very pivotal role in decision making of their husbands, brothers, sons and fathers so this training will provide an excellent boost to performance of all associates of the woman in all areas rather a few specifics. In addition, women equipped with all types of education will be in a strong position to provide all types of training to their children and hence play a strong role in advancement of society. Hence the positive effects of accepting equal number of women in every subject on advancement of society can be seen.

Educating equal number of women with all types of subjects will provide them with a strong base to delegate a wide range of knowledge to their children easily at their early stage of life. This, in turn will equip our children with a diverse type of training at very earlier stage. Since the early education and training of children are the most pivotal for their success in their life so such type of positive impacts will help develop a very strong generation and hence a strong and well trained society. In addition, a women equipped with equal variety of subjects will be in strong position to provide a very professional help to their children in their earlier career and hence play a very pivotal and strong role in development of a strong society. Thus the positive effects of equipping women with equal variety of subjects on grooming of our society can be seen.

Analyzing positive results on advancement of society and training's of our general have proved that equal number of women should be accepted in universities. It is recommended that government should provide necessary subsidies to universities as well as to women to realize this promising idea.

Re: Please pin point my errors and help with improvement tip

Posted: Mon Jul 28, 2014 1:14 pm
by saqibali
Anyone who can
Spot the grammer mistakes?
Challenge my task achievement?
Challenge my Understanding?
Suggest better variety of words and phrases?
Suggest better cohesion?
Suggest better sentences and words?