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venkatesh wrote:In this competitive world, the question often arises whether students should travel or work after their graduation to gain experience of the real world. In my opinion, taking a break after high school graduation has both advantages and disadvantages. Students understand current problems and new trends of the world.(<-- Through further study, travel or what they have already learnt at high school? This is very confusing. ) Based on that they will wisely make a move in their career. (<-- Wisely? I think you mean to say, 'Based on what high school graduates already know about the world, they will make a decision on whether it is better for them to travel or work.') However, there will be disadvantages in doing so, as it could lead to poor performance in their university studies.

Firstly, students opt for travel or work after their graduation will help in understanding present trends and situation of market. (<-- Reword to: Firstly, students opt for travel or work based on present trends the the state of the economy.) Moreover, students make use of this experience in choosing their course.(<-- What course? Course in life? Course at university?) Thus, real time job experience can have a positive impacton their studies, for example, in academic projects. Secondly, both travel and study will teach the importance of money and how to live independently. Students know the value of money and they can save money for their future. In addition, it will give confidence of "I can do it".

Conversely, students can be badly effected by taking break after their graduation. First of all, travel to other countries can influence their young mind and they may lose interest in their studies. Secondly, students can become trapped in illegal activities like drugs and gambling. Young minds are more interested in trying new things like drugs and gambling, as they spend earned money on these activities, become bankrupt and thus, lead to involvement in crime.

To sum up, choosing a break after high school helps young minds in gaining both real world experience as well as confidence. However, they could become addicted to illegal activities and thus lead to spoiling their future career.