Please assess my General Writing Task 2.

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vikasggn
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Please assess my General Writing Task 2.

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Some People say that dancing is an important part of culture. Do you agree or disagree
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Cultural heritage reflects the uniqueness of a place or a group of people. A culture has many attributes like clothing sense, dancing, eating habits, festivities and rituals. I strongly believe that Dancing is one of the most integral and important part of any culture. This will be proven by analyzing the close amalgamation of dancing and culture as well as understanding the needs or wishes of a cultural group.

Firstly, various dancing forms like Hip-hop, Samba, Opera and Bhangra have their origins as old as the cultural group they are representing. It is quite obvious that someone who is born and brought up in a culture will adopt these styles from their early childhood. As an example, it is in the blood of a Punjabi Indian family to dance on the themes of Bhangra whenever there is a need to celebrate. Culture and dance are so tightly inter-mingled that it is impossible to segregate them.

Secondly, dancing and culture represents various ways a community express its needs or wishes. This is quite apparent from the way a group or community involves in events like marriages, celebrating victories or a big harvest. Ancient Egypt, Arabic Countries and South American have various such events running for generations. These wonderful expressions cannot be easily taken away and thus make dancing an important ingredient of culture.

From the analysis of a tightly coupled culture with its age old traditional dance styles and underlying expressive needs, it is quite evident that dance would always be a vital element of a culture. Its importance might get dimmer but can never fade away.
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Re: Please assess my General Writing Task 2.

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vikasggn wrote:Some People say that dancing is an important part of culture. Do you agree or disagree
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Cultural heritage reflects the uniqueness of a place or a group of people. A culture has many attributes like dress sense, dancing, eating habits, festivities and rituals. I strongly believe that dancing is one of the most integral and important parts of any culture. This will be proven by analyzing the close amalgamation of dancing and culture as well as understanding the needs or wishes of a cultural group.

Firstly, various dancing forms like Hip-hop, Samba, Opera (<-- opera dancing? Do you mean opera singing?) and Bhangra are as old as the cultural groups they represent. It is quite obvious that someone who is born and brought up in a culture will adopt these styles from their early childhood. As an example, it is in the blood of a Punjabi Indian family to dance on the themes of Bhangra whenever there is a need to celebrate. Culture and dance are so tightly inter-mingled that it is impossible to separate them.

Secondly, dancing and culture represents various ways a community expresses its needs or wishes. This is quite apparent from the way a group or community holds events like marriages, celebrating victories or a big harvest. Ancient Egypt, Arabic countries and South America have such events that have been held for generations. These wonderful expressions cannot be easily taken away and thus make dancing an important ingredient of culture.

From the analysis of a tightly coupled culture with its age-old traditional dance styles and underlying expressive needs, it is quite evident that dance will always be a vital element of a culture. Its importance might get dimmer but can never fade away.
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