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please review my task2 esaay...pls do correct my essay

Posted: Wed Jul 30, 2014 9:52 am
by srikanth555
Schools concentrate far too much on traditional subjects which do not adequately prepare students for the realistic demands of the modern working world

My Response

In our country,The schools concentrate on traditional subjects varies.Most of the schools concentrate much on traditional subjects than modern subjects,due to this adopted method students may face several problems in the future.So,I believe to a certain extent that,maximum concentration of learning traditional subjects may make students unfit for the realistic demands of the modern working world.

Firstly,Now a days technology is playing very crucial role in the society.Students should be familiar with the modern subjects like Computers and Electronics in order to achieve success in their career,Otherwise they may face difficulties.Let us consider an example,At the time of leaving school student has no knowledge regarding technical subjects then he cannot understand further extension of the subject in Higher education.After getting his degree when he goes to job interview he unable to answer the basic questions of technical terms because he was aware of that concepts at school level.

Secondly,Every student has his own interest on particular subjects like Mathematics,Physics.So,School faculty should allow students to concentrate on the subjects based on their interest.Spending more interest on concepts like world war and other concepts wont be helpful in the modern world.However,traditional subjects also necessary to read by every individual but concentrating on them more will not be helpful in the future.

To sum up, Every school in our Country should give maximum priority to modern subjects than traditional subjects this would help to students greatly in their career.

Re: please review my task2 esaay...pls do correct my essay

Posted: Thu Jul 31, 2014 1:00 pm
by srikanth555
please reply to my post

Re: please review my task2 esaay...pls do correct my essay

Posted: Sat Aug 02, 2014 6:01 pm
by saqibali
Sentence structure need improvement