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sivaprasad1110 wrote: Dear Jack and John,

I hope that you people would be having a great time. (<--Reword to: "I hope that you are both well.")I am writing this letter to thank you for the great holiday because, that was much needed for me to have a break from the busy work schedule of mine. (<--Reword to: "I am writing to thank you for the great holiday. It was a much needed break from my busy work schedule.) I would also like thanks for sending the photos. (<--Reword to: "I would also like to thank you for sending the photos.") It had refreshed my memories. (<--Reword to: "They have reminded me of all the fun we had.")

I am sorry that I haven't been in touch since then, because of the current project deadlines and hardly had any liesure time. (<--Reword to: "I am sorry that I haven't been in touch since then. Work has been very busy and I haven't had much free time.") I expects that you people might also busy with your work as well. (<--Reword to: "I guess that you both must be busy at work as well.")

I would like to invite you people for visiting my city London and stay along with me for atleast a couple of weeks time at my place. (<--Reword to: "I would like to invite you both to come and stay with me in London for at least a couple of weeks.") As my project is getting completed in a couple of weeks time I hope you people will visit my place as soon as possible. (<--Reword to: "My project will be completed in a few weeks time, so I would love for you to visit as soon as possible.")I assure you that London have lots of historic and beautiful place for seeing. (<--Reword to: "London has many beautiful sights we can visit,") I had mentioned my address and contact number below. (<--Reword to: "My address and phone number are below.")

Your Friend
Shiv