20 September Ielts Answer( check my work and correct me)
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Many people think that children should be encouraged to play outdoor games which require physical activities; others think that computer games are better.
Do you agree or disagree
A matter of considerable controversy at present is the issue of whether children should be promoted towards outdoor physical activities; or rather they should be insisted to play computer games. It is agreed that kids should be encouraged to play outdoor games. This will be proven by looking at how playing outside precursor to children’s physical, mental and social wellbeing.
Firstly, playing outdoor sports catalyse young people’s physical fitness. For example, in many Asian countries, particularly China and India, children are fortified to play outdoor activities, such as football and cricket. As a result kids are able to stimulate their energy and create positive attitude toward their academic sector and maintain their weight, health and mental activeness. From this it is quite evident that outdoor games hold several merits for children.
Secondly, playing outside plays a pivotal role to maintain and adapt social nature. Take my daughter as an example. I have four-years-old daughter and I take her public park every day to play swing, rocker and other games which required physical strength and she has made numbers of friends. This has consequently helped my daughter several skills, like communication, working in a team and sharing, which is believed to be essential attributes for being socialised. This is therefore proved that physical activities in outside environment is beneficial for kids overall development.
To conclude, children who play outside are able to accumulate various important attributes like physical, psychological and collective welfare. Thus it is agreed that teenagers should be motivated towards physical outdoor activities. It is recommended that parents as well as teachers create a positive behaviour and make the outdoor interesting, so that they are inclined towards outdoor activities.
You recently spend night at your friend’s house and forget your watch. Write a letter to your friend, in your letter please include.
Thanks him/her
Explain how the watch is
Tell her how to send the watch
Dear Jessi,
How are you and your family? I am writing to inform you about the watch which I forgot at your home during my stay this weekend.
Firstly, thank you so much for the great hospitality you provided for me when I was at your home. It is my pleasure to have such friend who is indeed caring and loving. Your parents were too courteous because they prepared dinner despite of their physical inabilities.
Well, my watch was gifted by my grandmother so I am very attached to it. If you remember that watch, I left it on the side table during my stay. It is Elite Quartz watch with black band, and more importantly four-small diamonds are attached at the four corners of the watch.
I would like you to put the watch safely and bring it during my birthday party next month. Otherwise you can even visit my place this week, and please do not forget to bring watch along with you. Hope you understand the importance of that watch in my life and return it as soon as possible.
Hope to see you soon, and please convey my gratitude to your parents.
With love,
Aditi
Many people think that children should be encouraged to play outdoor games which require physical activities; others think that computer games are better.
Do you agree or disagree
A matter of considerable controversy at present is the issue of whether children should be promoted towards outdoor physical activities; or rather they should be insisted to play computer games. It is agreed that kids should be encouraged to play outdoor games. This will be proven by looking at how playing outside precursor to children’s physical, mental and social wellbeing.
Firstly, playing outdoor sports catalyse young people’s physical fitness. For example, in many Asian countries, particularly China and India, children are fortified to play outdoor activities, such as football and cricket. As a result kids are able to stimulate their energy and create positive attitude toward their academic sector and maintain their weight, health and mental activeness. From this it is quite evident that outdoor games hold several merits for children.
Secondly, playing outside plays a pivotal role to maintain and adapt social nature. Take my daughter as an example. I have four-years-old daughter and I take her public park every day to play swing, rocker and other games which required physical strength and she has made numbers of friends. This has consequently helped my daughter several skills, like communication, working in a team and sharing, which is believed to be essential attributes for being socialised. This is therefore proved that physical activities in outside environment is beneficial for kids overall development.
To conclude, children who play outside are able to accumulate various important attributes like physical, psychological and collective welfare. Thus it is agreed that teenagers should be motivated towards physical outdoor activities. It is recommended that parents as well as teachers create a positive behaviour and make the outdoor interesting, so that they are inclined towards outdoor activities.
You recently spend night at your friend’s house and forget your watch. Write a letter to your friend, in your letter please include.
Thanks him/her
Explain how the watch is
Tell her how to send the watch
Dear Jessi,
How are you and your family? I am writing to inform you about the watch which I forgot at your home during my stay this weekend.
Firstly, thank you so much for the great hospitality you provided for me when I was at your home. It is my pleasure to have such friend who is indeed caring and loving. Your parents were too courteous because they prepared dinner despite of their physical inabilities.
Well, my watch was gifted by my grandmother so I am very attached to it. If you remember that watch, I left it on the side table during my stay. It is Elite Quartz watch with black band, and more importantly four-small diamonds are attached at the four corners of the watch.
I would like you to put the watch safely and bring it during my birthday party next month. Otherwise you can even visit my place this week, and please do not forget to bring watch along with you. Hope you understand the importance of that watch in my life and return it as soon as possible.
Hope to see you soon, and please convey my gratitude to your parents.
With love,
Aditi