would any one please correct my Ielts writing essay task 2
Posted: Sun Oct 05, 2014 12:12 pm
Q) Some people think that the teenage are the happiest times of most people lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities.
Discuss both these views and gives your opinion.
Ans)
In modern days every person in community wants to live happily at all stages of their life cycle. Some people think that, people who are in teenage stage can enjoy their lives happily and joyful. While other people argue that adulthood is the stage, where it gives complete happiness. In this essay I shall discuss both views and express my opinion.
Adulthood, where it adds matured and experienced moments to the life. The people who are in matured stage are economically independent. They have created their own life without depending on their family. They have got the mental ability to think about right things. They are the people who play lead role in whole family and they can do things better because of their matured mind. For example, my elder brother, John, is in adulthood stage now. He got recently married, bought a new villa and moved to another company. With an excellent performance done by him in less span of time, the company has given half of shares from its profits. This is all because of his creative mind in the stage that he is living.
On the other hand, the moments that people enjoy in teenage is the happiest moments and people never forget those even when they are in oldies. People are in teenage stage does not have any responsibilities and they are seem to be free birds. They don’t have to work and they enjoy lot of funny activities at all times. For instance, my cousin, Jim, who is enjoying his teenage moments, does not care about things like studies and health. He always was sparing time with the things such as listening music and playing sports especially cricket and football.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that , adulthood is the most joyful moment even though problems and responsibilities are on way with them.
Discuss both these views and gives your opinion.
Ans)
In modern days every person in community wants to live happily at all stages of their life cycle. Some people think that, people who are in teenage stage can enjoy their lives happily and joyful. While other people argue that adulthood is the stage, where it gives complete happiness. In this essay I shall discuss both views and express my opinion.
Adulthood, where it adds matured and experienced moments to the life. The people who are in matured stage are economically independent. They have created their own life without depending on their family. They have got the mental ability to think about right things. They are the people who play lead role in whole family and they can do things better because of their matured mind. For example, my elder brother, John, is in adulthood stage now. He got recently married, bought a new villa and moved to another company. With an excellent performance done by him in less span of time, the company has given half of shares from its profits. This is all because of his creative mind in the stage that he is living.
On the other hand, the moments that people enjoy in teenage is the happiest moments and people never forget those even when they are in oldies. People are in teenage stage does not have any responsibilities and they are seem to be free birds. They don’t have to work and they enjoy lot of funny activities at all times. For instance, my cousin, Jim, who is enjoying his teenage moments, does not care about things like studies and health. He always was sparing time with the things such as listening music and playing sports especially cricket and football.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that , adulthood is the most joyful moment even though problems and responsibilities are on way with them.