Please help me to evaluate my second essay
Posted: Thu Nov 20, 2014 6:06 am
Topic 74:
Currently more and more people respect elders and become convinced that older people should live with their families which is in contrast to the view that older people should live at a nursing home. What is your opinion?
In eastern countries, elders usually live with their own families, while in western countries, they normal choose to live at a nursing home. Although I am from Vietnam, an eastern country, I am personally supportive of the later thanks to following reasons.
The first reason is that there is always a gap between two generations which can demolish their relationship when they live under on roof. For instance, in my home country, older people prefer having dinner at home; meanwhile young couple usually like to eat out to save time. Obviously, the conflict may involve much bigger matters which the two generations never share the same thought. By and large, living together has a negative impact on the relationship if parents and children have very dissimilar perceptions.
Another reason is that living at home; the elderly never receive the same professional service as at nursing home where all staff is certified for their qualification of taking care older people. For example, the elderly is at times in hot temper which only patient nurses know how to deal with properly. By sending parents to a nursing home, children can still visit them every day and ensure that they are receiving the best service on ending days of their lives. Seniors are therefore best taken care in a nursing home instead of at their own home.
As suggested above, the elderly should live in a nursing home to avoid possible conflicts with their children and to receive a professional service. It is recommended that eastern countries like Vietnam or China develop a better system of nursing houses to provide older people with better living conditions.
Word Count: 276
Please tell me does it deserve a "7"?
Thank you!
Currently more and more people respect elders and become convinced that older people should live with their families which is in contrast to the view that older people should live at a nursing home. What is your opinion?
In eastern countries, elders usually live with their own families, while in western countries, they normal choose to live at a nursing home. Although I am from Vietnam, an eastern country, I am personally supportive of the later thanks to following reasons.
The first reason is that there is always a gap between two generations which can demolish their relationship when they live under on roof. For instance, in my home country, older people prefer having dinner at home; meanwhile young couple usually like to eat out to save time. Obviously, the conflict may involve much bigger matters which the two generations never share the same thought. By and large, living together has a negative impact on the relationship if parents and children have very dissimilar perceptions.
Another reason is that living at home; the elderly never receive the same professional service as at nursing home where all staff is certified for their qualification of taking care older people. For example, the elderly is at times in hot temper which only patient nurses know how to deal with properly. By sending parents to a nursing home, children can still visit them every day and ensure that they are receiving the best service on ending days of their lives. Seniors are therefore best taken care in a nursing home instead of at their own home.
As suggested above, the elderly should live in a nursing home to avoid possible conflicts with their children and to receive a professional service. It is recommended that eastern countries like Vietnam or China develop a better system of nursing houses to provide older people with better living conditions.
Word Count: 276
Please tell me does it deserve a "7"?
Thank you!