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Posted: Tue Dec 24, 2013 5:05 pm
IELTS- Task 2 Writing Topics 16-12-2013
Essay 1- Smoking is a bad habit and should be abandoned completely worldwide.Give your views in not less than 250 words.
“Stop smoking or die trying” . In today’s human world this is very hasty and stressful so most commonly people have accepted smoking to get rid of that distress. But too much of smoking is injurious to health and it can kill you. In my opinion smoking should be banned because there is only destruction on smokers pathway.
The most important reason is that too much smoking can lead a smoker to cancer. Lung cancer is very dangerous disease, Moreover some patients can afford the cure but some can not and they die cause of it.
The second reason is an addiction to smoking is not so much socially accepted. Moreover a very excessive smoke addict usually does not have good societal status. People who are smoking at home can have a bad impression on their children may be they can start smoking at their early adolescent. For example young smoker ratio has raised in our society.
The last reason is smoking not only injures the smoker but the people around him or her. For instance scientific study is that the smoker is active smoker and people near to him or her are passive smoker and when an active smoker exhale then a passive smoker can inhale that and it is equally dangerous for passive smoker.
To conclude, smoking is not the cure for stress, However it leads to death. People should really accept exercise or any sports activity instead of smoking.
Essay 1- Smoking is a bad habit and should be abandoned completely worldwide.Give your views in not less than 250 words.
“Stop smoking or die trying” . In today’s human world this is very hasty and stressful so most commonly people have accepted smoking to get rid of that distress. But too much of smoking is injurious to health and it can kill you. In my opinion smoking should be banned because there is only destruction on smokers pathway.
The most important reason is that too much smoking can lead a smoker to cancer. Lung cancer is very dangerous disease, Moreover some patients can afford the cure but some can not and they die cause of it.
The second reason is an addiction to smoking is not so much socially accepted. Moreover a very excessive smoke addict usually does not have good societal status. People who are smoking at home can have a bad impression on their children may be they can start smoking at their early adolescent. For example young smoker ratio has raised in our society.
The last reason is smoking not only injures the smoker but the people around him or her. For instance scientific study is that the smoker is active smoker and people near to him or her are passive smoker and when an active smoker exhale then a passive smoker can inhale that and it is equally dangerous for passive smoker.
To conclude, smoking is not the cure for stress, However it leads to death. People should really accept exercise or any sports activity instead of smoking.