Practice Writing Task 2

[waseem]

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Question: Some people think that parents should tech children how to be good member of society, others, however, believed that school is the place to learn this.
discuss both these views and give your opinion.

My Answer:


It is necessary for the children to let it know that how important role they play in the society, It is believed by some people that parents are the primary teacher of their children, so basically children learn how to be a member of a society from their parents. But some other believed that school is the place where they learn about the society as an member of it. Parents are their best teacher or school is place to learn the society norms.

Children learn quickly what it has been taught by their parents. In this way parents give knowledge to their children that how to be a member of a society and another vital point is that as an father or mother they know better about their kids, they know how to guide their kids through different ways. They may have personal experience by using their own experience they can enhance their children a better way. So that is the reason people used to say parents should teach to their children by themselves about society.

On the other hand some people believe that school is the best place for the children to learn or increase their social activities. School is the place where children meat new people they get social environment where they learn various new things, perhaps which they have not learned before. Therefore, School plays an important role for the children to get the information about the society.

In the final analysis people perceive that parents can be the good teacher for their children while some think that school helps children to know that how to be a well behaved member of the society. But it seems to me that school generates the social role of the member among the children and school should be appreciated for this.

[Flick]

Question: Some people think that parents should teach children how to be a good member of society, others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.
Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

My Answer:


It is necessary for children to learn about the important role they play in society. It is believed by some people that parents are the primary teacher of their children, so basically children learn how to be a member of a society from their parents. But some others believe that school is the place where they learn about being a member of society. Parents are their best teacher or school is place to learn the society norms.(<--Delete this sentence. It doesn't add anything to your essay. You have already summarized the two sides of the debate.)

Children learn quickly from their parents. In this way, parents give knowledge to their children about how to be a valuable member of society. This is an effective way to teach because the child's father or mother know their kids, they know how to guide their kids through different ways. They may have personal experience, and by using their own experience they can educate their children in a better way. So that is the reason why people say parents should teach their children about how to be a valuable member of society.

On the other hand, some people believe that school is the best place for children to learn or increase their social activities. School is the place where children meet new people, they get social environment where they learn various new things, including things they have not learned before. Therefore, school plays an important role in teaching children about society.

In the final analysis, people perceive that parents can be good teachers for their children, while some think that school helps children to learn how to be a well behaved member of society. It seems to me that school teaches the social role to children and school should be appreciated for this.

[waseem]

Thank you very much sir, i would like to ask something from you, if you don't mind kindly tell me how much band i can get in IELTS writing module as you checked my sample test.
Thank you once again, God bless you.