please,a little advice"A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions"

[aurora_vietnamita]

In these days, a human’s real value has opened up a controversy. The criteria of the past such as virtues seem to be overwhelmed by social status and material possessions. This opinion shows a limitation in the way of thought of those who are blurred by this material world.
It is obvious that many powerful and wealthy men are of high value. Obama, Bill Gates, Steve Jobs are rewarding embodiments for this. Especially, these men of greatness are always leading a simple lifestyle with out of mode clothes. Wealthy and powerful as they are, they are not judged by their properties. What make their worthy are their rewarding virtues such as diligence, honor, nonstop efforts to positively change the world, and devotions for a better life. That is to say, the value of everybody stay right inside them, it is precious qualities, potential power, talents and ideas, which can be explored and exploited to catalyze opportunities, open up promising avenues and create masterpieces and the incredible.
Common material values should be looked down on as there are temporary. It is further from the truth that social status and possessions can prove one’s worth. These things can be illegally obtained such as corruption, stealing, cheating, and illegal business. These evil sins are usually covered by the power of money and can lead to uncountable miseries, social matters and dilemmas. Many of them are still living outside the law and. It is our all-time duty to protect the right.
In a nutshell, nothing material can make up one’s value. Only our qualities and contributions that prove our eternal worthiness with humanity.
thanks for your attention!

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Nowadays, a person's perceived value has opened up a controversy. The criteria of the past, such as virtues, seem to be overwhelmed by social status and material possessions. This opinion shows a limitation in the thinking of those who are impressed by material wealth.

It is obvious that many powerful and wealthy men are of high value. Barack Obama, Bill Gates, and Steve Jobs are examples of this. However, these men of greatness tend to lead simple lifestyles with out fancy clothes. Wealthy and powerful as they are, they are not judged by their possessions. What makes them worthy are their virtues such as diligence, honor, nonstop efforts to positively change the world, and commitment to building a better life. That is to say, the value of everybody stay right inside them, it is precious qualities, potential power, talents and ideas, which can be explored and exploited to catalyze opportunities, open up promising avenues and create masterpieces and the incredible.(<--I don't understand this sentence. The beginning is confusing, and it is too long.)

Common material values should be looked down on as they are temporary. It is not true that social status and possessions prove one’s worth. These things can be illegally obtained through corruption, stealing, cheating, and illegal business. These sins are usually covered by the power of money and can lead to uncountable miseries, social matters and dilemmas.(<--What do you mean? What is the power of money? What are the social matters and dilemmas?) Many of them are still living outside the law and it is our all-time duty to protect the right.(<--Protect the right what?)

In a nutshell, nothing material can make up one’s value. Only our qualities and contributions prove our worthiness as people.