IELTS general writing task 2 -1

[faty]

In most developed countries, shopping is not only aout buying goods you need. It is also perceived as entertainment. Is it a positive or negative development. Give your own opinion and examples based o your experience.
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Shopping nowadays, has become one of the sources of entertainment for most of the people. This is nowhere more evident in the shopping centers, where people spend time together to purchase routine things; grocery and other things. It is considered to be helpful in relieving stress and revive positive energy among people. This perception will be analyzed by taking into account the memories and time factor associated with such activities.

Looking first at the quality of time, most people consider shopping as the most appropriate way of spending leisure hour with family. Take crowded shopping malls during weekends, for instance. Most of the women find pleasure in buying beautiful attire for their family. Furthermore, food courts and busy play areas after shopping make the time more auspicious.This example clearly reveals that shopping helps in making relationship bonds even healthier.

It is also felt by many tat buying routine items associate memories with it. For example, if parents make a habit of buying grocery every weekend together with their children. They will not only enjoy the journey but will infuse a sense of responsibility among kids of how important the task is. These memories can be stacked and thus become a lifetime asset to rejoice.

To sum up the examples above, it clearly signifies that in this stressful environment where spending money has become a pain in the neck, people have altered their perceptions and rather made it a source of happiness.

[faty]

Can some one please evaluate

[Flick]

In most developed countries, shopping is not only aout buying goods you need. It is also perceived as entertainment. Is it a positive or negative development. Give your own opinion and examples based o your experience.
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Shopping nowadays has become a source of entertainment for many people. This is most evident in shopping centers, where people spend time together to purchase routine things; groceries and other things. It is considered to be helpful in relieving stress and reviving positive energy. This perception will be analyzed by taking into account the memories and time factors associated with such activities.

Looking first at the quality of time, most people consider shopping as the most appropriate way of spending leisure time with family. Take crowded shopping malls during weekends, for instance. Many women find pleasure in buying beautiful attire for their family. Furthermore, food courts and busy play areas after shopping make the time more auspicious.(<--I don't understand this sentence) This example clearly reveals that shopping helps in making relationship bonds even healthier.

It is also felt by many that buying routine items create positivie memories. For example, if parents make a habit of buying groceries every weekend together with their children, they will not only enjoy the journey but will infuse a sense of responsibility in their children of how important the task is. These memories can be stacked and thus become a lifetime asset to take pleasure in.

To sum up the examples above, it clearly signifies that in this stressful environment where spending money has become a pain in the neck, people have altered their perceptions and rather made it a source of happiness.

[vivek001]

Hi Team,

I am a little confused about the use of "most" in below sentnece.
As i read we use the before superlative degree or it should be more.

This is most evident in shopping centers,---

Please suggest.

Regards
Vivek