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please give response on my essay

Posted: Fri Aug 21, 2015 3:16 am
by azambashir
A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Status of a person is one thing, which has been observed by others since dawn of time. Throughout history, it has been seen distinctly that person value belongs to his social status and asset he keeps. It is agreed that person respect is based on materialistic thing instead of realistic things. This argument will be proven by looking at how money matters significantly instead of monetizing values in a society.

For one, social status is symbol of peace and faith for people, they work simply from dawn to dusk to create their own status in society. For example, when I was in my teen age I had to follow the rigorous schedule of studying hard to make a successful person in life to create own status and making more money. This makes it clear that how money matters by facing problems in whole life except ignoring all values in society. As my example shows, money matters most then basic lessons in life.

In addition to this, kindness and other moral standards are although fact of real life but not seems to be crucial in a real world. An instance illustrating this in action is as returning to my prior example as a teen, I had to follow the rules to focus on my studies, given attention to study whole day by not even playing fundamental games makes me more materialistic person then realistic by not following the basics. Thus, this daily practice for being a social person in life makes me sick and as a consequence of it, made me an irresponsible person in society. As a result, basic discipline doesn’t matter for me except my social status.

Following this looks at these two points how enormously asset demanded more then factual standards. It has been proven that respect can be own through money which is highly demanded than other values which are useless now a days. Thus, owning a financial status has more pros then cons and it can be gained only by focusing on high statuses of people.

Re: please give response on my essay

Posted: Mon Sep 07, 2015 9:13 pm
by Flick
azambashir wrote:A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Status of a person is one thing, which has been observed by others since dawn of time.(<--Reword to: "People have always been judged on their social status and material possessions.") Throughout history, it has been seen distinctly that person value belongs to his social status and asset he keeps.(<--Delete this sentence. It is repeating the first sentence.) It is agreed that people are judged based on materialistic things instead of realistic things. This argument will be proven by looking at how money matters significantly instead of monetizing values in a society.

For one, social status is a symbol of peace and faith for people, they work simply from dawn to dusk to create their own status in society. For example, when I was a teenager I had to follow the rigorous schedule of studying hard to become a successful person in life to create status and make money. This makes it clear that money matters by facing problems in whole life except ignoring all values in society.(<--I don't understand this sentence.) As my example shows, money matters more than basic lessons in life.

In addition to this, although kindness and other moral standards are a part of real life, they are not crucial in the real world. An instance illustrating this in action is as returning to my prior example as a teen, I had to follow the rules to focus on my studies, pay attention to study the whole day by not even playing fundamental games makes me more materialistic person then realistic by not following the basics.(<--I don't understand this sentence.) Thus, this daily practice for being a social person in life makes me sick and as a consequence of it, made me an irresponsible person in society. As a result, basic discipline doesn’t matter for me except my social status.(<--I do not understand your reasoning. Why doesn't basic discipline matter?)

Following this look at these two points how enormously asset demanded more then factual standards.(<--Reword to: "In summary, it is clear that money and material wealth has a greater impact on one's social status than other characteristics.") It has been proven that respect can be earned through money which is more highly demanded than other values which are useless nowadays. Thus, owning a financial status has more pros then cons and it can be gained only by focusing on high statuses of people.