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The bar chart illustrates the prediction of percentage of purpose and sex of the drivers on traveling by cars, in 2005. Overall, It is clearly seen that more women and men driving their cars to go to work, while the least of purpose of men driver is to go to bank and women is to visiting town.
Going to working place by car is the highest driving aim for both women and man, with approximately 39% and 53% respectively. There are around 17% of women drive their own car to go to shopping center, as opposed with exactly 10% men that driving cars to the same place. On the other hand, both women and women also using their cars to go to courses place, with 11% and 9% severally.
However, only there are around 3% of women that tripled by men whose driving their cars to visiting town, which is opposed with driving for visiting bank, with around 9% women and only around 4% men. The same pattern continued in the purpose of running errand and visiting friends with exactly 10% and around 8% of women and only 4% and 5% men. Nevertheless, there more man driver than women in the purpose of visiting recreational places.
In conclusion, we can see that there is more women driver to go to courses places, banks, running errands, visiting friend and shopping while men drive more dominant in the purpose of visiting town, recreation and working places.

The bar chart illustrates the prediction of percentage of purpose and sex of the drivers on traveling by cars, in 2005. Overall, It is clearly seen that more women and men driving their cars to go to work, while the least of purpose of men driver is to go to bank and women is to visiting town.
Going to working place by car is the highest driving aim for both women and man (men), with approximately 39% and 53% respectively. There are around 17% of women (+who) drive their own car to go to shopping center, as opposed with (to) exactly 10% men that (who - that is for stuffs) driving cars to the same place. On the other hand, both women (man) and women also (redundant) using (use) their cars to go to courses place, with 11% and 9% severally.
However, only there are around 3% of women that tripled by men whose driving their cars to visiting (visit) town, which is opposed with (to) driving for visiting bank, with around 9% women and only around 4% men. The same pattern continued in the purpose of running errand and visiting friends with exactly 10% and around 8% of women and only 4% and 5% men. Nevertheless (?), there more man driver than women in the purpose of visiting recreational places.
In conclusion, we can see that there is more women driver to go to courses places, banks, running errands, visiting friend and shopping while men drive more dominant in the purpose of visiting town, recreation and working places.

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