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tinhocanhduong259 wrote: The line graph presents the demand for electricity in English homes in winter and summer, while the pie chart describes how that electricity is used.

As can be seen that , the line graph , there was a sharp fluctuation in the electricity in winter from 0 hour to 12 hours from 35.000 units of electricity to 40.000 units of electricity , the electricity in winter peaked at over 40.000 the electricity in winter from 15 hours to 22 hours then dropped under 40.000 the electricity .(<--This is too much information in one sentence. Reword to: "The line graph shows a sharp fluctuation in winter from midnight to midday. Electricity use at midnight was around 35 units. This rose to about 39 units at 3am, dropped to about 31 units at 6am, then rose to 39 units again at midday. The highest use of 45 units occurred at about 10pm before dropping back to 35 units.")

In contrast, electricity use in summer dropped slightly from 18 units of electricity to 12 units of electricity from midnight to 9am, and peaked at 20 units of electricity at about 3pm. However, there were fluctuations from 20 units of electricity to around 18 units of electricity.

Turning to the pie chart , the rate of heating rooms , heating water and the rate of overs ,kettles , washing machines had the greatest 52.5 % and 17.5 % respectively .(<--Reword to: "The pie chart shows 52.5% of electricity is used to heat rooms and water, followed by ovens, kettles and washing machines at 17.5%.") Likewise , the proportion of the lighting , Tv , radio is the same the rate of vacuum cleaners , food , food mixer , elctric tool is 15 % .(<--Reword to: "LIghting, TV and radio accounted for 15% of electricity use, as did vacuum cleaners, food mixers and electric tools.")

Overall , the line graph the electricity in winter is greater than the the electricity in summer .(<--Reword to: "Overall, the line graph shows greater electricity use in winter than in summer, while the pie chart shows heating is the most common reason for electricity use.") By contrast , the pie chart the heating rooms , heating water is the largest .