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task 1 test 3 cambridge 4

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The bar chart presents the different level of post school qualifications in Australia and the percentage of female and males who held the in 1999.
As can be seen that ,the skilled vocational diploma from group males had the greatest 90 % . While the postgraduate diploma from men is greater than the figure master’s degree 70 % and 60 % respectively .Incontrast , the undergraduate diploma from males was significantly higher than the beachelor’s degree 40 % and 48 % respectively .
Turing to the groups women , the undergraduate diploma had the greatest 70% , the bachelor’s degree accounted for 55 % and the master’s degree is larger than the postgraduate diploma 40 % and 30% respectively .Incontrast , the skilld vocational diploma is the lowest over 10 % .
Overall , the rate of men in post school qualifications in Australia is higher than the number of women.
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tinhocanhduong259 wrote:The bar chart represents the different post-school qualifications in Australia according to gender in 1999.

As can be seen that ,the skilled vocational diploma from group males had the greatest 90 % .(<--Reword to: "Significantly more males than females gained a skilled vocational diploma, 90% and 10% respectively.") While the postgraduate diploma from men is greater than the figure master’s degree 70 % and 60 % respectively .(<--Reword to: "70% of men and 30% of women held postgraduate diplomas.") Incontrast , the undergraduate diploma from males was significantly higher than the beachelor’s degree 40 % and 48 % respectively .(<--Reword to: "Conversely, 70% of women and only 35% of men had an undergraduate diploma. However, a similar number of men and women held bachelor's degrees, 45% and 55% respectively.")

Turing to the groups women , the undergraduate diploma had the greatest 70% , the bachelor’s degree accounted for 55 % and the master’s degree is larger than the postgraduate diploma 40 % and 30% respectively .Incontrast , the skilld vocational diploma is the lowest over 10 % .(<--Why do you only discuss women here? In the paragraph above, you compare men and women.)

Overall , the rate of men with post-school qualifications in Australia in 1999 is higher than the number of women.
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