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tinhocanhduong259 wrote:The bar chart represents the different post-school qualifications in Australia according to gender in 1999.

As can be seen that ,the skilled vocational diploma from group males had the greatest 90 % .(<--Reword to: "Significantly more males than females gained a skilled vocational diploma, 90% and 10% respectively.") While the postgraduate diploma from men is greater than the figure master’s degree 70 % and 60 % respectively .(<--Reword to: "70% of men and 30% of women held postgraduate diplomas.") Incontrast , the undergraduate diploma from males was significantly higher than the beachelor’s degree 40 % and 48 % respectively .(<--Reword to: "Conversely, 70% of women and only 35% of men had an undergraduate diploma. However, a similar number of men and women held bachelor's degrees, 45% and 55% respectively.")

Turing to the groups women , the undergraduate diploma had the greatest 70% , the bachelor’s degree accounted for 55 % and the master’s degree is larger than the postgraduate diploma 40 % and 30% respectively .Incontrast , the skilld vocational diploma is the lowest over 10 % .(<--Why do you only discuss women here? In the paragraph above, you compare men and women.)

Overall , the rate of men with post-school qualifications in Australia in 1999 is higher than the number of women.