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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction.
To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?
During the children’s early age, when it is vital for them to learn what is right or wrong, some say that punishment is needed as for them to learn the difference. In my opinion, punishment is not helpful in guiding these children.
While educating the young ones, sometimes, punishment is required in order for them to learn from the lessons when they had made the wrong decisions or mistakes. This is also mainly to avoid children in repeating the same mistakes and learn to behave and think in moral. Thus, such light punishment as scolding is essential for children to distinct between right and wrong.
However, punishment often could causes more negative impacts on children in which their behaviours and thinking will be altered in time. In another word, certain children will become more stubborn and refuse to listen to their parents and teachers. Such situation can also leads to miss-communication among them. Clearly, punishment not only fails in teaching children the goodwill, but also causes more issues in parenting.
To teach today’s children the good behaviour, both parents and teachers ought to constantly communicate with young children. The adults should always provide positive advice and negotiate with their children in how to differentiate between right and wrong and from this, they will come to an understanding on why their parents or teachers punish them. It is always effective for the adults to teach them through intimate and thorough communication rather than physically punish the children.
In sum, although children must learn to differentiate what is right and wrong, punishment is not necessarily a useful lesson. Parents and teachers should understand how punishment would affects their children’s mental and physical developments while finding a better solution. (286 words)
Cambridge Ielts 10 Test 1 Writing Task 1
The pie charts illustrate the energy use (heating, water heating, refrigeration, other appliances, lighting and cooling) of houses in Australia as well as the greenhouse gas emissions that generate by these usage. Units are measured in %.
Overall, heating spends the most energy in house and followed by water heating as well as other appliances. Nevertheless, refrigeration, lighting and cooling use less energy amongst all. Though heating consumes the most energy, its greenhouse gas emission is lower in comparing with all of others.
In terms of energy use, the Australian families spend 42% and 30% on both heating and water heating respectively while other appliances use double the lower than water heating, which is 15% only. Despite, Australians use less than 10% on refrigeration, lighting and cooling (with 7%, 4% and 2% accordingly) at homes.
The usage of energy in Australia homes have causes greenhouse gas emissions. While heating uses most energy, it generates only 15% of greenhouse gas whereas other appliances and refrigeration produce almost a double in comparing with its usage, at 15% and 14% separately. Instead, both lighting and cooling emit only 8% as well as 3% of greenhouse gas although both witness higher figures compared with energy use. (202 words)
To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?
During the children’s early age, when it is vital for them to learn what is right or wrong, some say that punishment is needed as for them to learn the difference. In my opinion, punishment is not helpful in guiding these children.
While educating the young ones, sometimes, punishment is required in order for them to learn from the lessons when they had made the wrong decisions or mistakes. This is also mainly to avoid children in repeating the same mistakes and learn to behave and think in moral. Thus, such light punishment as scolding is essential for children to distinct between right and wrong.
However, punishment often could causes more negative impacts on children in which their behaviours and thinking will be altered in time. In another word, certain children will become more stubborn and refuse to listen to their parents and teachers. Such situation can also leads to miss-communication among them. Clearly, punishment not only fails in teaching children the goodwill, but also causes more issues in parenting.
To teach today’s children the good behaviour, both parents and teachers ought to constantly communicate with young children. The adults should always provide positive advice and negotiate with their children in how to differentiate between right and wrong and from this, they will come to an understanding on why their parents or teachers punish them. It is always effective for the adults to teach them through intimate and thorough communication rather than physically punish the children.
In sum, although children must learn to differentiate what is right and wrong, punishment is not necessarily a useful lesson. Parents and teachers should understand how punishment would affects their children’s mental and physical developments while finding a better solution. (286 words)
Cambridge Ielts 10 Test 1 Writing Task 1
The pie charts illustrate the energy use (heating, water heating, refrigeration, other appliances, lighting and cooling) of houses in Australia as well as the greenhouse gas emissions that generate by these usage. Units are measured in %.
Overall, heating spends the most energy in house and followed by water heating as well as other appliances. Nevertheless, refrigeration, lighting and cooling use less energy amongst all. Though heating consumes the most energy, its greenhouse gas emission is lower in comparing with all of others.
In terms of energy use, the Australian families spend 42% and 30% on both heating and water heating respectively while other appliances use double the lower than water heating, which is 15% only. Despite, Australians use less than 10% on refrigeration, lighting and cooling (with 7%, 4% and 2% accordingly) at homes.
The usage of energy in Australia homes have causes greenhouse gas emissions. While heating uses most energy, it generates only 15% of greenhouse gas whereas other appliances and refrigeration produce almost a double in comparing with its usage, at 15% and 14% separately. Instead, both lighting and cooling emit only 8% as well as 3% of greenhouse gas although both witness higher figures compared with energy use. (202 words)