Pressure on children - Task 2 - Please assess

[adnanaadil]

Nowadays children are experiencing increased educational, social and commercial pressure. What are the reasons for this? What can be a solution to reduce the pressure?

Children are the future of our society. As the world has been progressing, there has been many positive developments such as the advancement of technology, however, there has also been some drawbacks. Advocates are of the view that there has been an increasing pressure on children in regards to education, socially and commercially. In my view, I agree to this consensus and will discuss the reasons as well as a solution to this problem.

There are important reasons to this hurdle. Firstly, we live in a highly competitive environment in the 21st century. There has been an increasing sense of high expectation from parents towards their children. In addition to do well academically, they want them to excel in all parts of life, such as in extracurricular activities. This extra pressure to do well can be burdensome for some students and can lead to lower performance, overall. Secondly, children today study in free public schools, where individuals from all socioeconomic status are mixed together. Children who can afford material things, therefore influence pupils who belong to lower economic status. These children would have the need of want for such items and can have an instant dissatisfaction with their lives, if their needs are not fulfilled. Moreover, commercial advertisement on television of products also add do this rising problem.

To counter this problem, parents need to take an initiative by realizing the potential of a child, as every child is different. In addition, they also need to be close to their children by sharing their love, kindness and listen as well as understand the problems they are going through, which will create a trust between a parent and a child.

In conclusion, we can see that to tackle the pressures put on a child, parents need to be realistic in their approach and realize the difficulties a child faces while growing up. It is imperative that an initiative be taken to handle this rising crises.

[David.IELTS.Examiner]

Hello!

Quite good on the problems, though these points are not well-developed. However, the main issue is with the solution which is so general as to be meaningless. Will parents' love automatically over-ride all other factors?

All the best,
David