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Topic:-

Some people think that teenage years are the happiest times of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities.

Discuss both these viewpoints and give your own opinion.


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Human life goes through various phases having multiple events to celebrate and everyone tries to cherish them to their best.

While in the teenager phase, generally people would be having much of a freedom to do the things with limited tasks to perform. For e.g. Students will have only one objective as to focus on their academics and pursue the things of their interest for their career growth. With that, it gives them more flexibility to enjoy their time with loved ones and friends. However, they have more dependency on their parents for financial and decision process to move forward. For e.g. College expenses needs to be bear by the parents and even the monthly expenses in form of pocket money needs to be given by parents.

On the contrary, as one grows older, people tend to be more responsible and accountable for things what they do comparatively. Adults tend to be more bounded with their family commitments. They will be more independent as they start earning for their livelihood. You connect with a new set of people be in personal or professional front. Even then there are many joyous events they go through, for e.g. celebrating one’s anniversary or kid’s birthday or going on a vacation and spending quality time with their family.

I believe and in support with enjoying happiness in the adult phase as it make one more organized and mature not in terms of physically but in their thought process which eventually enhances in their decision making and experience a spectrum of challenges. In this phase, you can be a master of your own in every step what you take right from buying a grocery till owning a house.

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Appreciate your response.

[David.IELTS.Examiner]

Hello!

Ouch! You haven't clearly related these points to levels of happiness! The question hasn't been clearly answered.

Complete rewrite required.
David