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DJvj
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Please review Task 2 for GT and rate.

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It is believed that the rise of petrol prices would solve the growing traffic and pollution problems. Others, however, think that there are better ways to solve them.

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With the global warming, one of the major contributors to it is emission of the fossil fuels coming out of the vehicles. As per the statistics, majority of the people have a car at home and with the rising of the population the number is multiplying day by day despite of knowing the fact of volatility in fuel prices.

Some people believe that rising of the prices will help to control the pollution and jams caused by vehicular movement. If the prices are too high, it will let people to contemplate twice before taking their vehicles out as it may hit his monthly budget. For e.g. if someone would like to buy a grocery from around shop, then he would prefer to walk OR place an online order for delivery which will eventually reduce a vehicle on the road. People can do more carpooling in order to reduce the number of vehicles from the road, thus reducing the pollution and jams.

Another ways to resolve this should be by encouraging people to use the public transportation. Government should help in providing the better infrastructure with a good connectivity which can help commuters to travel with ease. For e.g. Metro access with good frequency or by providing track for cyclist to cycle around. Initiative like odd-even cars movement can substantially help in reducing the pollution and implicitly let people to use the public transportation.

To conclude this, I think there are various ways which can be driven and make the place pollution free which can help someone to breathe the fresh air.


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Re: Please review Task 2 for GT and rate.

Post by David.IELTS.Examiner »

Hello!

The grammar and vocabulary are quite good, but the ideas are weak. Don't be too sad about that, because almost everyone will answer with similar points.

'If prices are too high ...' Yes, but prices have been relatively high in European countries for a while and there's not much indication that it is having an effect.

Online ordering doesn't reduce the number of vehicles because delivery services use them.

Encouraging people to use public transport is a good idea, but it hasn't really worked in most situations. London and Beijing are good examples.

Odd-even schemes aren't really used in the long term, so the situation is unclear. Beijing and Delhi have tried them.

As I said, it's not easy for students to get ideas on this topic. I suspect that the real solutions to this problem will need to be quite radical and perhaps most students are not prepared to suggest them.

A few ideas ...
1. Ban cars from certain areas
2. Ban parking on streets, but have more car parks near commonly visited locations
3. Make cars REALLY expensive to buy and/or run
4. Improve public transport at night and on holidays

All the best,
David
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DJvj wrote:topic:-
It is believed that the rise of petrol prices would solve the growing traffic and pollution problems. Others, however, think that there are better ways to solve them.

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With the onset of global warming, one of the major contributors is the emission of fossil fuels coming out of vehicles. As per the statistics, the majority of people who own a car and with the rising population, the issue is increasing day by day despite volatility in fuel prices.

Some people believe that increasing petrol prices will help to control pollution and traffic jams caused by vehicular movement. If the prices are too high, it will encourage people to think twice before taking their vehicles out as it may be too expensive. For example, if someone needs to buy groceries, then he might prefer to walk or place an online order for delivery which will eventually reduce the number of vehicles on the road. People can do more carpooling in order to reduce traffic, thus reducing pollution and delays.

Another way to resolve this should be by encouraging people to use public transportation. The government should help in providing better infrastructure with a good connectivity which can help commuters to travel with ease. For example, metro access with good frequency or by providing bicycle lanes could reduce vehicle use. Initiatives like odd-even car movement can substantially help in reducing pollution and implicitly encourage people to use public transportation.

To conclude, I think there are various methods which can be implemented to make the world pollution free so everyone can breathe the fresh air.
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