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Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world.
What are the reasons for this, and suggest some solutions.

These days, Many people have become worried about the large numbers of youth crime . It is often that The rates of youth crime have increased significantly around the world and these crimes have threaten to human beings. This is essay will discuss the reasons for this and examine the potential solutions .
To begin with , there are several reasons of growing the youth crime .Firstly, A large number of crime have included with family and parents are responsible for this. This because at the present time , we can be seen that when parents are going to office or different types of sector for working , the majority of young children are neglected to the planet . They, For example, are watching a variety of television shows on television that these programs impact on their mental health , and that Also they are able to aggressive their mind and thoughts such as games , which are likely to be assisted the crimes,resulting in destroying children rest of life and affecting many people .
However, This has too possible solutions that these people can reduce different types of youth crime easily , first and foremost , A top priority of government should protect the youth crimes,with spending sufficient money in education . This , which encourages to children's to have a proper knowledge at school or university into the atmosphere , is indispensable nowadays .For instance ,in Bangladesh , It can be seen that the majority of people take a major role model to reduce the youth crime such as the poverty people who can not study properly due to spend money, get some beneficial tips . As a result , as they are educated person in most cities , economical improvements have
increased .

To conclude, Although many people are affected dangerous crime such as murder , Individual and government have become a good role model that is important . Therefore , I agree that parents are a great influence not to include children with the crime

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Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world.
What are the reasons for this, and suggest some solutions.

Recently, many people have become worried about the increasing numbers of youth crime. It is often that The rates of youth crime have increased significantly around the world and these crimes have threaten to human beings.(<--I don't understand this sentence.) This essay will discuss the reasons for this and examine the potential solutions.

To begin with, there are several reasons for this increase in youth crime. Firstly, a large number of crime have included with family and parents are responsible for this.(<--I don't understand this sentence.) This is because when parents go to work, their children are being left alone. They, for example, are watching a variety of television shows that impact on their mental health. , and that Also they are able to aggressive their mind and thoughts such as games , which are likely to be assisted the crimes,resulting in destroying children rest of life and affecting many people .(<--Reword to: "They are also playing violent video games which encourage them to attempt dangerous acts in real life.")

However, there are two possible solutions that can reduce different types of youth crime easily. First and foremost, a top priority of government should be to spend sufficient money in education. This encourages children to gain an education and build a successful life. For instance, in Bangladesh, it can be seen that the majority of people take a major role model to reduce the youth crime such as the poverty people who can not study properly due to spend money, get some beneficial tips .(<--I don't understand this sentence.) As a result , as they are educated person in most cities , economical improvements have
increased .(<--I don't understand this sentence.)

To conclude, although many people are affected by dangerous crimes such as murder, individuals and government have become a good role model that is important. Therefore, I agree that parents are a great influence on their children.