Writing task 2 - People moving away from rural areas

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Manta
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Writing task 2 - People moving away from rural areas

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In many countries, people are moving away from rural areas and towards urban areas.
Why do you think that is?
What problems can this cause?

The phenomenon of people moving away from rural areas toward big cities has affected several countries in the last decades. In my opinion, this will be a huge problem in the future because it is important to have a better balanced distribution of population.

One of the main cause of this movement is the lack of jobs in the countryside. People struggle to find a good job and decide to move to the city in order to have a better chance to find it. Moreover, we have to consider that it is not easy to live in rural areas with lack of facilities such as a good internet connection, public transports and so on, that are very important in modern days. People just want to make use of these facilities in order to improve their lifestyle.

Besides the reasonable motivations that can lead people to move, this phenomenon could cause huge problems to the administration of the cities. Indeed it could lead to overpopulation causing the decrease in the offer for jobs due to the rising demand for it, resulting in unemployment. In addition to that, there can be difficulties in satisfying primary needs such as food and water.

It is also worth noting that if the cities get overcrowded, the rural areas will be almost inhabited. This would be a great problem because of the decrease in agricultural production, which can lead to a lack of food in urban areas as a side effect. There are no areas to cultivate there and there would easily be a drought of vegetables.

In conclusion, perhaps governments have to find a way to stop people from moving away, in order to maintain a high standard of life in the country.

Thanks for the help :)
David.IELTS.Examiner
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Re: Writing task 2 - People moving away from rural areas

Post by David.IELTS.Examiner »

Hello!

I think that you have presented some good ideas, but have not developed them sufficiently. For example, you say - probably correctly - that this can cause problems for city admin, but you fail to mention what those problems are (which the question does ask you to do!).

Develop the ideas and rewrite the essay. Post the new one as a fresh thread.

All the best,
David
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