is university degree important?

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Nowadays, university education is considered very important for people’s future. However there are lots of successful people who didn’t not get higher education.
Do you think higher education is necessary to succeed in life? Justify your opinion with relevant examples

Been successful have been measured by the height one gets to the peak of studying. This have make people think that becoming a successful man is dependent on attaining a bachelor’s degree. This essay will analyze this debate and come up with a conclusion.

Admittedly, most successful men in the world have gone through the walls of the University to become whom they are. Example the noble physicist Alchemy whom made the laws about flotation, the great businessman Steve Jobs whom invented microsoft and others too numerous to mention. Their been successful have been attributed to attending the university. However, the likes of Abedy Pele the great footballer, Michael Jackson the great singer have also made their mark on the road to success without passing through the schools.

The university is not a compulsory place to be especially when someone cannot afford paying his way through higher institution. One cannot be stagnant in life because he does not have financial capability to pay his tuition. There should be other avenues to achieve success. Likewise, there are some people who lack the desire of going to school. These individual are gifted in the area of handwork and craftsmanship. They can decide to go on and earn a living from their natural capability.

In brief,I do not agree that having a degree determines the successfulness of an individual. Other areas can be exploited to achieve results and also make ends meet. However, if one have the privilege to study to attain the height of study by going to the university, he should not fail to do so.

[David.IELTS.Examiner]

Hello!

Overall, a reasonable essay. I think that you could have made it clearer in the conclusion where a degree might be useful or not so useful. The examples are reasonable, but explain why those people needed or did not need degrees. And Steve Jobs was associated with Apple, not Microsoft!

Vocabulary is good. The range of grammar is quite good but there are numerous mistakes. However these do not interfere much with understanding.

All the best,
David