Kindly assess my General Task 2

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Inventors are not as important to society as doctors

To what extent do you agree with this statement.


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Inventors are not as important to society as doctors” is a sentences which worth thinking. Both Inventors and Doctors are backbone in each society, without them there will be no balance. Each one of them has his own responsibilities and the efforts of both should not be neglected. Being a doctor is from the most ethical professions in the whole word, Imagine life without medicine. On the other hand inventors, what a precious and extraordinary job more than this. They are the controllers of this world and the responsible ones for each single progress it may happened.

Being a doctor is not only a job you are practicing, it is about sacrificing by personal and non-personal time, about ethics in each word and each action done. Who did not live the life of a doctor do not absolutely know how much is the responsibility he is facing every day when it is related to another soul’s life this soul can be one of the family mother father brothers or even kids. Doctors can be called any time during the day to their jib and they have to call faithfully. There is no holidays for them. Who did not face a bad time before and was in-need for the doctor.

On the other hand Inventors, The greatness of the name is enough to explain how they really are unique and extraordinary. Imagine a life with no invention, with no progress. Try to imagine a world without trains cars telephones internet electronics even drugs. The invention is the mean of civilization, without scientists and inventors the world may be still traveling on horses. Each government should pay the most tension to those group of people as they represent the future for every nation, and by them it is clear to see how much this nation is civilized.


Last of all, Life is like a circle where people complete each other’s. Doctors save lives inventors make a better life. You cannot deny the role of any member in the society. Both the inventors need the doctors and vice versa. There is no future without inventors and no present without doctors. It is unfair to put both in comparison better to call them a team.

[David.IELTS.Examiner]

Hello!

An interesting question, but rather strange!

Introduction - Quite good but rather long - as long as the two main paragraphs.

First main paragraph - All jobs require sacrificing time. Doctors do get holidays. You have extra doctors to cover for them at these times.

I'm a little disappointed that you missed the obvious point - that doctors are sometimes/often inventors!

Grammar and vocabulary are reasonably good, but I think that a little more thought would result in a much better essay.

All the best,
David