IELTS Writing Task 1 - about public library

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IELTS Writing Task 1 - about public library

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The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph gives information about Burnaby Public Library between 2011 and 2014. It illustrates how many library books read by male and female during the four-year period.

Overall, there was a huge different trend of reading between men and women, the number of books read by men more than women. As opposed, women started off reading more books than men, but their reading drop below the level of men in the end of this period.

The number of books read by men increased steadily between 2011 and 2012, from around 3000 to 4000 books, after that the numbers rose dramatically to 1000, and reached a peak of 14000 in 2014 books. This was the highest point in this graph.

Women began reading 5000 books in 2011, and the number went up gradually to 8000, and then reaching to 1000 books in 2013. But their numbers dropped sharply again to 8000 books.


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Re: IELTS Writing Task 1 - about public library

Post by David.IELTS.Examiner »

Hello!

Not bad, but I think that you need to make more points about the data, e.g. that in 2013 the numbers of books are the same.

Be careful with grammar. There's not much chance to use a variety of structures here, so using the past simple is best.

All the best,
David
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