Agree/disagree - Academic Wrt part 2 correction :) I need a 7 score. Thx :)
Posted: Mon Mar 14, 2016 11:39 am
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I'm new on this blog I'm Paolo from Italy
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Life was better when technology was simpler. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Innovation has come a long way during the last decade. Despite the profound improvements it has been providing, there are different concerns whether or not our lifestyle had a better quality when technology was elementary. It is totally agreed that technological knowledge has been contributing to a higher style of living. This essay will discuss firstly, that technology has made socializing easier, and secondly, that today is simpler finding directions for a place than before.
The use of social networks has been making communication more effective through the globe. People of different cultures can share their thoughts simply by posting them on a web page, or can get in touch through messages apps. Take Skype as an example, by sharing a simple nickname, people can communicate in real time with no costs all around the globe! Therefore, regional boundaries are no longer an issue for communicating.
Innovation has also been contributing to help people moving around. It is in the common eye that using smartphones for finding directions for a place is much faster than consulting a paper map. Google Map is widespread and used by people as it gives directions not only by texting the address of a place but also through vocal commands. These kinds of technologies have simplified travelling as well as given the right itinerary without any sort of mistake.
In conclusion, hi-tech is improving our life by simplifying the way people use to get in contact with throughout the world, as well as helping people moving from a place to another one. In my opinion, innovation will play a crucial role in developing a higher style of life and governments should encourage researchers by providing enough funding to make this possible.
I'm new on this blog I'm Paolo from Italy Is there anyone who can asses my writing? I need a band 7. However, any suggestion is warmly welcomed
Life was better when technology was simpler. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Innovation has come a long way during the last decade. Despite the profound improvements it has been providing, there are different concerns whether or not our lifestyle had a better quality when technology was elementary. It is totally agreed that technological knowledge has been contributing to a higher style of living. This essay will discuss firstly, that technology has made socializing easier, and secondly, that today is simpler finding directions for a place than before.
The use of social networks has been making communication more effective through the globe. People of different cultures can share their thoughts simply by posting them on a web page, or can get in touch through messages apps. Take Skype as an example, by sharing a simple nickname, people can communicate in real time with no costs all around the globe! Therefore, regional boundaries are no longer an issue for communicating.
Innovation has also been contributing to help people moving around. It is in the common eye that using smartphones for finding directions for a place is much faster than consulting a paper map. Google Map is widespread and used by people as it gives directions not only by texting the address of a place but also through vocal commands. These kinds of technologies have simplified travelling as well as given the right itinerary without any sort of mistake.
In conclusion, hi-tech is improving our life by simplifying the way people use to get in contact with throughout the world, as well as helping people moving from a place to another one. In my opinion, innovation will play a crucial role in developing a higher style of life and governments should encourage researchers by providing enough funding to make this possible.